2016年09月10日

IELTSのスピーキングpart2が苦手。。。the news you have heard recentlyで、オリンピックについて書いてみた


オンラインレッスンでIELTSを中心に受けてますが
スピーキングをやっとちゃんとやり始めたら
part1,3はどうにかなりそうだけど
part2 がぜんぜんなんかダメダメで。。

ってことで、昨夜受けたレッスンの

Describe a good news you’ve heard recently.
You should say:
- When it was?
- What the news was about?
- And explain why people liked that news?

っていうのをレッスン後に復習として
ライティングで書き起こして
フルーツフルイングリッシュに出してみた。

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で、久々の公開!

最近はBTでライティングやってるから
こうやってブログで公開処刑やってなかったよねー。

フルーツフルの場合は
チケットに有効期限がないから
それはそれでメリットだけど
期間があくときはずっとあいてしまう。

他で添削やってもらってるから
今の場合は特に問題はないけどね。


評価
Lv4 ほとんどネイティブの書いた英文と同じレベルに達しています。


メッセージ
Thank you for your really great effort today. It's clear you have worked very hard on this assignment, and your efforts are working really well for you! I've corrected your errors, so please enjoy reviewing the corrections, which will be helpful for you as you continue to improve your English.

First, we need to remember to use articles when we have countable nouns, so if you have noun in a sentence and you feel you can count it (like vegetables, or tables or apples), we need to use articles - "the" if they are specific and "a/an" if they are general or being introduced for the first time. Look out for these additions above! Also, if we are dealing with an uncountable noun or a plural, general noun, we don’t need an article preceding it!

Then, the biggest point I wanted to address is that we needed to add "will" many times, because you are talking about future events as you feel quite certain about them - this completes your sentences in a proper way.

Wonderful! I hope this helps you, and that you continue to enjoy learning English!


添削詳細

Any recent news does not come up to my No recent news comes to mind, but I would like to talk about the news on about the Tokyo Olympics in 2020. I heard the news about it last year and was so excited so much! I believe most Japanese people were energized by the this announcement. First of all, thanks to the Olympics, the national revenue will be increased increase a lot. Many foreigners will come to our country and eat at restaurants and purchase various things. This is clearly good for the economy. Japanese economic status has been experiencing hard times. The Japanese economy has been experiencing hard times. This could be a wonderful chance to recover the this situation. Moreover, our culture could will be known by more people, since many people in other countries will watch the games on TV. The more people get to know our culture and tradition traditions, the more actively communication and interaction will take place among countries all around the world. I believe it could lead to a more peaceful world through the Olympic games. Another advantage of holding the major sports event is that the government will try to construct facilities for athletes and tourists, which will help the local economy enjoy the boom. The employment rate would will be improved. This is the news I was impressed the most recently.


っていう感じでした。


今日は土曜日。

今朝はもうTOEFLスピーキングレッスン含む25分レッスンを2回を終えました。
このあとIELTSスピーキングレッスン25分を5回予約してあります。
その後、夜に時々英会話で50分を1レッスン予約してあります。

オンライン英会話は合計225分ですね、本日。

そのあとやっとJRC-MAPです。

そのあいだの時間でシャドーイングとかコピーイングと暗唱、
SAの予習とかもやってます。



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