2016年08月11日

英検1級二次スピーチ添削結果:The pros and cons of university entrance exams.

フルーツフルからの添削結果公開しちゃおうのコーナー。今日は山の日なので3つ連投します!の、3つ目。

最後は
The pros and cons of university entrance exams.
です。


添削結果
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講評
Lv4 ほとんどネイティブの書いた英文と同じレベルに達しています。

...あ、今回の3連投の中で一番このLvのつけ方が甘い先生が4て。相当ひどいかもしれない。。



先生からのメッセージ
I think that entrance examinations are necessary, as you said, to act as a filter. However I dislike them intensely and especially hate the pressure and stress that they give to young people.

Your writing today was good on the whole, but there were quite a lot of small grammatical errors, mostly article mistakes.

For example at (A) 'ability' is a countable noun, so it has to either use 'a' (or 'an'), or be in the plural form with an 's'.

Also, at (D), things normally provide inspiration 'for' other people, rather than 'of' them.

Please check out my other corrections and try to use them in future assignments.

Enjoy your holidays!


入試とか試験とか大好きな(センター試験もワクワク楽しかった)あたしとは話が(好みが)あわなさそうだ(笑


添削内容詳細+反省

 There are several pros and cons of university entrance exams. One of the good points is that students with a high level of intellectual ability can obtain a variety of opportunities after graduation. Universities, on the other hand, can measure the perseverance and endurance of students, which are imperative for people to achieve academic success. Entrance exams act like filters.
 Moreover, a good performer in the entrance exam becomes the inspiration of for other students and encourages them to take part in the competitive environment of these exams and thus brings about the enhancement of quality and excellence in education on the whole.
 In contrast, private cram schools have turned education into business where they prioritize their profits more than educational purposes. They tend to teach short-cuts instead of encouraging them to gain sufficient knowledge.
 Students are already fed up with the highly competitive world of education. This can result in a total loss or lack of interest in studies. Sometimes the fierce conditions related to entrance exams cause mental and physical problems among young people. Even worse is that there are students who end up taking their own lives or hurting themselves.


みごとに、冠詞ばかり。
日本語にいくら冠詞がないとはいえ
これはひどい。

今まで読んできた多少の文章とか聞いたパッセージとか
音読、シャドーイングしてきたものがあるんだだから
ちょこっとだけは冠詞の感覚 a sense of articles みたいなのが
あると思うし、間違えてはいけないところで間違えてるね。

a variety of とか。


はい!
以上、3連投おわりー。


ずっとSalah.さんと一緒にやってきた英検1級スピーチ作って暗唱から添削に提出してましたが、次からはIELTSのTask2とかTOEFLライティングとかを出しちゃおうかなって思ってます。



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